Looking good but possibly needs a couple of minor gag tweaks...
E.g Possibly,
Bathroom sequence - Son standing still outside the toilet (hut?) holding mothers coat / handbag (piled up) as his hair blows in the strong wind. We hear his mother peeing (possibly whistling - gag: the only time we hear her speak). The sons eyes raise and drop (he's been here before - the shame).
Bubblegum end sequence - Have the bench move as he walks away due to the sticky bubblegum (gag - his mother still won't leave him alone).
I don't know, but I'm sort of wondering if maybe the mum's teeth might make a reappearance in the final post-credits coda - appearing on something else unexpectantly? Probably too much! Not sure now about the bird poo - it seems a bit unfair somehow doesn't it? And it's not really about the mother anymore. It seems to me if you were to have a post-credit coda it should be about an aspect of the mother - still 'haunting' him somehow - which is why finding her teeth on something again feels funnier, if less credible!
Could you complete a personal declaration form (available in the CGAA office) and give it to Campus Registry + your passport, so they can make a copy asap? I'm just chasing down a few student blanks before the trip can be signed off. If you've already done this, it might be that you're showing as a blank because the form you did fill out was somehow incomplete - if so, could you pop into Campus Registry and see what they're missing from you? Cheers!
Hi Nat, Looking good so far obviously plenty still to do and I am sure you will impress everyone with your choice of how it turns out in the end, noted Tutorphil's comment he may have something there. From Cote d Azure
Looking good but possibly needs a couple of minor gag tweaks...
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Bathroom sequence - Son standing still outside the toilet (hut?) holding mothers coat / handbag (piled up) as his hair blows in the strong wind. We hear his mother peeing (possibly whistling - gag: the only time we hear her speak). The sons eyes raise and drop (he's been here before - the shame).
Bubblegum end sequence - Have the bench move as he walks away due to the sticky bubblegum (gag - his mother still won't leave him alone).
* Still won't leave him alone in a nice way....
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Hi Nat,
ReplyDeleteI don't know, but I'm sort of wondering if maybe the mum's teeth might make a reappearance in the final post-credits coda - appearing on something else unexpectantly? Probably too much! Not sure now about the bird poo - it seems a bit unfair somehow doesn't it? And it's not really about the mother anymore. It seems to me if you were to have a post-credit coda it should be about an aspect of the mother - still 'haunting' him somehow - which is why finding her teeth on something again feels funnier, if less credible!
Agreed - Bubblegum gag or teeth gag = a lingering connection with his mother after she has passed.
ReplyDeleteHi Nat,
ReplyDeleteCould you complete a personal declaration form (available in the CGAA office) and give it to Campus Registry + your passport, so they can make a copy asap? I'm just chasing down a few student blanks before the trip can be signed off. If you've already done this, it might be that you're showing as a blank because the form you did fill out was somehow incomplete - if so, could you pop into Campus Registry and see what they're missing from you? Cheers!
Hi Nat, Looking good so far obviously plenty still to do and I am sure you will impress everyone with your choice of how it turns out in the end, noted Tutorphil's comment he may have something there.
ReplyDeleteFrom Cote d Azure